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Some people think environmental protection is the responsibility of politicians, not individuals as individuals can do too little. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some people believe that only the government is responsible for protecting the
environment
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. From my perspective, I somewhat agree with
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 view. There are several reasons why I believe that authorities have the power to protect the
environment
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.
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 of all, our
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 faces a lot of issues
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 as global warming, deforestation and so on. I think that governments are able to solve those problems.
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 they could invest a huge amount of money in building waste treatment systems. Another reason is that the politicians have the authority to bring in new regulations and laws.
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, they can impose heavy fines on people who cut down trees to make way for accommodations, industrial zones and cause deforestation.
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, I
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 hold the belief that the citizens are responsible for environmental protection.
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 with, littering is the main reason that leads to pollution and citizens are people who do it
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 as if individuals don't litter any more, the
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 will not become polluted. The
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 reason is that they totally can proactively choose to use reusable products that will help reduce the plastic release to the
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, when citizens go shopping, they can use the cloth bag for storage.
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 that way, I believe that they completely reduce the quiet plastic being released into the
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. In conclusion, I am of the opinion that the responsibility of protecting the
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 is the obligation of both government and individuals.
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