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HAVING MORE MONEY AND LESS FREE TIME IS BETTER THAN EARNING LESS MONEY AND HAVING MORE FREE TIME.

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Having huge
money
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 with short leisure
time
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 is better in everyone’s life as compared to minimum wealth with more free
time
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. Nowadays, people are more inclined towards earning more
money
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 so they
don’t
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 have much spare
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 for other activities like physical exercises and
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 lesser moment for get-together parties by which they feel more comfortable.
This
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 essay will examine both viewpoints and highlight why I feel work-life balance is really important in anyone’s life.
To begin
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 with, most people considered that a Luxurious lifestyle will only be achieved by earning more
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 wherein they have compromised with leisure events. In other ways, earning is better than expenditure on unnecessary parties or an event.
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, folks are giving more attention to their business to earn profits
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 of focusing on their health concern which they generally did in the
last
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 few decades for their happy lifestyle. Recently, a survey was conducted by the world happiness department where 45% population has been doing extra efforts in their business for earning more whereas they
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 take seriousness about their health.
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, the luxurious standard will achieve once we earn more.
On the other hand
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, scarcity of
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 will always create large difficulties but more free
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 could support to learn various different things which actually
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 require
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 like singing and dancing activities sometimes which is in-build or get through practice.
For example
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, in Indian Idol, which is a reality dancing competition in which many youngsters who come from the poor financial background but they really perform well during the championship because of their dedication and hard work in it. In conclusion, both the situation is difficult to survive properly because a rich person can earn huge amount but they
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 focus towards their health due to scarcity of
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 while poor people will do hard work during their leisure
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 to get fame in their life.I my opinion, financial status along with self-confidence helpful to get success.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial security
  • facilitating
  • lifestyle
  • professional development
  • increased stress
  • work-life balance
  • hobbies
  • quality time
  • physical and mental health
  • financial constraints
  • luxury items
  • overall well-being
  • personal growth
  • middle ground
  • sacrificing
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