Some companies sponsor sports as a way to advertise themselves. Some people think it is good, while others think there are disadvantages to this. Discuss both sides and give your opinion?

Many
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feel that it is effective for some business-related organizations to sponsor
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games and athletics as a method of disseminating their stock, while others believe that there
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dissatisfaction to
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. The purpose of
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argument. There are some merits of spending money on pastime to proclaim some institution's device. The most important is that It is the easiest and rapid way to reach the device to
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family. Most of the society watch game on television in our country and so as those advertisements.
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this
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they can get to know
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the products.
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whenever I take my younger brother to any shop he prefers those kinds of food or any other crop which he watches on television.
As a result
company's sales are being increased.
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financial support. A game match requires
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amount of money. The board of pastime match can reduce the burden of excessive expense by earning some from
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which they can even conserve for the players or any
next
event. There are
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some dissatisfactions of advertising some company's device in a sports match.
First
of all, as they spend
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amount of money on the match, that's why sometimes they demand more priorities and focus solely on their production.
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could be a reason for
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distraction.
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a year ago one of the well-known institutions of our country took
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on a cricket match where they gave more priorities on their company name than the name of our country on the jersey.
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this
sometimes folk get annoyed reiterated watching
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. In conclusion, I strongly believe that
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argument has both merits and demerits.
However
, I strongly support that by advertising products companies can
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profit, expand their businesses and
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recruit more man as well as help the sports authority to accomplish the match perfectly.
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  • Sports sponsorship
  • financial support
  • athletes
  • brand visibility
  • awareness
  • commercialization
  • integrity
  • dependencies
  • corporate funds
  • unethical practices
  • strategic partnerships
  • communal relations
  • promote healthy lifestyles
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