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Some People Believe that a person's Culture is defined by their country of origin, while others believe that has only a minor influence. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

#people #person #culture #country #origin #influence
There are different types of
culture
 in different countries.It is a big debate between the
socity
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society
 is that some part of the population think that the tradition of the
the
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humans represents their birth
country
,but rest of the public are against with
this
 statement.I have mentioned both of these views in
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 paragraphs with my opinion. On the one side,
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 believe that we can judge the origin of the community from
thier
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their
lifestyle
.Every place
of
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 the earth
have
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 different types of
culture
.There
are
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number
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 of nations in the world and their
lifestyle
is vary
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 from place to place.So it is very easy to guess the birth origin of the
socity
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society
 through their
culture
.
For instance
,the choice of dressing
is depends
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 upon the tradition of the
country
.
Moreover
,the taste of food
is
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also
 vary from nation to nation.We can judge a person from their consuming habit. On the other side,some community believe that we cannot judge the birth
country
 of anybody from their
lifestyle
.According to these people,
culture
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the culture
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 of the human beings is depends upon the area where they are living presently not on
country
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.
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,
demand
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the demand
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of
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for
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 clothes
are
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 changing
acccording
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according
 to the atmosphere.Nowadays people adopted
the
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western
culture
.So it is very hard to guess the origin of
socity
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society
 from their
culture
. According to my point of view,
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 standards of
the
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people are changing with technology.
New
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 generation of a
country
adopt
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 the
lifestyle
 of
another countries
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another country
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.They want to know about the
culture
 of various nations.
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