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Students should choose a university major that prepares them for high-paying careers. To what extend do you agree with this statement.

#students #university #careers
Although
 ,Education plays a vital role in getting Employment for
a
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 undergraduate because it is the major decision for a graduate to opt for the right field of expertise which leads to their course growth.In my opinion, I don't agree with the statement that a student are ought to choose a University major that opens the gates for high -
pay
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 careers because any person who has a
job
 that doesn't give them happiness or draw their interest cannot survive or fit in the
career
 for long. University is the turning point in every student life to decide in which field
one
 want to shape up their future.I believe that any junior before starting their
career
 should research their interests and skill set which evolve them to grow as an individual and excel in their course. No matter what
career
one
 opt for, I believe if
one
 can master in any field of their interest will pave the way for
a high-pay jobs
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a high-pay job
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. For an instance, Jeff Bezos the CEO put his skills to work on Wall Street later by enhancing and working on his idea lead to
one
 of the biggest e-commerce websites in the world. Of course, a university major which is in high demand will help you land a
job
 with
high-income
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 but it doesn't provide happiness. If an individual is dissatisfied with their work will have an effect on their
job
 performance.Which in turn leads to termination of the
job
. In conclusion, I would say every undergraduate ought to opt for a
career
 based on their interest irrespective of the pay. If
one
 is good at what you do , you can grow and have chances to build an organization that leads to
career
 opportunities for others.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • university major
  • high paying careers
  • long-term satisfaction
  • fulfillment
  • factors
  • potential
  • income
  • passion
  • interest
  • success
  • job satisfaction
  • transferable skills
  • balance
  • personal interests
  • financial stability
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