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It is now possible for scientists and tourists to travel to remote natural environments, such as the south pole. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

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 of the most conspicuous trends of today's world is a colossal upsurge in the number of believing that it is now possible for scientists and tourists to travel to remote natural
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 as the south pole. There
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 of arguments in favour of my stance. The most preponderant
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 is that the
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 to travel to remote natural
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environments
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 going to for relaxation and
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weather
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 learn more about the discovery in the travelling time. The
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natural
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 many things in life. There are
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, some pitfalls
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 easily overwhelm the potential benefits of the natural
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. The primary
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 stems from the fact that by observing the aforementioned trend,
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 but
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 gauged the magnitude of its repercussions when it's come to today,s ever-changing lifestyle.
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travelling to remote natural
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 are indeed too great to ignore.
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