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Nowadays most of the parents are working which lead to harmful effects on their children. What are the causes of it? What could be the results of it?

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Currently, most of the couples are working to meet both ends of the family. The high rate of
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inflation is the prime reason for the same and
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 can result in damaging effects on the younger ones in the home.
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 essay shall provide points to support my statement. Due to the ever-rising inflation, the prices of houses, groceries, medical and education has been skyrocketed. Eventually, both parents forced to work for the betterment of the family and the stable financial status.
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, the budget can
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 apart and creates
crisis
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 in the home and may not be able to provide basic amenities to
children
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the middle- class family of Indian allows women to work even immediately after
child birth
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 as well.
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Children
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 are often joined in child-minding facilities or send to
grand parents
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 to look after them. Slowly and gradually, the younger generation would be away from their loved
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. Since they are deprived of love and affection, they may seek
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comfort from friends and
neighbors
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, even from online circles. There are many
pit-falls
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 groups and often these
children
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 end up in the hands of predators.
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 have been engaging in drug- trafficking since they need to escape from
loneliness
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. In conclusion, inflation of money has been jumping significantly, makes parents of the family
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work hard to financially support .
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,
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 scenario develops some negative impacts
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 the family; lack of emotional connection between loved ones.

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Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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