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Nowadays parents put too much pressure on their children to succeed. What is the reason for doing this? Enhance future life style Is this a negative or positive development?

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Parents are believed to be overly pressuring their
children
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 on their success. While there are some reasonable grounds
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 phenomenon with
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an explanation
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 and example. There are motives for parents to force
children
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 to prosper.
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 of which is the fact that they want to secure their offspring with a bright future. Every family wants their
children
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 to be superior to
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society and have a stable mature
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,
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 the reason why early enforcement for preparation is preferred. Another reason is that some mom and dad want to see their former ambitions or dreams in action, so they implement them on the
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 generation.
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 rooted
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 the struggling formative
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 in the past, so putting pressure on their kids
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strive to succeed with their dream in the modern days might be the other way to achieve their
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 aims.
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, my personal belief is that
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 will bring no good to the family dynamic and
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 to the future development of the descendants. Obliging a way of success on a young person against their will cause tension between family members and might result in futurenegative
behaviors
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 of the child.
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, constrained work time without recess might lead to exhaustion and other psychological disorder that takes years to cure and surely affect
children
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's mental state hereafter. Every person should have the freedom to have a well-balanced lifestyle with work and play, and the mature members in the family should be the
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 to ensure, not to break that. In conclusion,
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parents for pushing their
children
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 too hard forward, it would only be counter-effective and
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 they should give their
children
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way
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 to
stablize
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stabilize
 their
life
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.
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