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More people have unhealthy diet and do not do enough exercises. What are the reasons for this? How can we encourage people to have healthier lifestyle?

#people #diet #exercises #lifestyle
Human's good
health
 play a vital role in their
life
 performance. Nowadays, number of
people
 increasing who are not taking healthy nutritional diet which contains plenty of vitamins
also
 not doing any physical exercise which help them to stay fit and physically strong In
this
 essay will discuss what are the problems come in their path and how eradicate and
people
 follow about good
health
 guidelines.
First
 and the foremost reason, there are mostly men and women are doing jobs due to their long working hours they feel too tired and
also
 don't have time to prepare home made healthy
food
. They buy online or buy from Market themselves because it's easy available near by their markets and very low cost
Hence
people
 feel more comfortable to buy junk
food
instead
 of make
food
 at home.
Although
, it has some side effects and
also
 creates many diseases: obesity, blood sugar , heart , cholesterol etc. These saturated fats are harmful for human's body.
Secondly
, Lack of physical activity make them more lazy. They like to watch television or using internet on their phones and laptops, so they are becoming more inactive. It's directly impact on their mental productivity.
In addition
 they will not grow physically and mentally strong. There are numerous things available in
this
 world, which can be motivate to youngsters: become an icon , singer , successful businessman their desires, etc. Government should take some mandatory steps and start campaign about healthy lifestyle ,their benifits too. There is online platform available where they can learn exercises and making nutritional
food
 which will be helpful for them .
Hence
, A good state of
life
 encourage them to do something in their
life
: awareness, their brain will work properly, help them to stay fit and active all the time their work performance will improve which is good for their better career, their
life
 will change and they will live happily
life
. In conlusion , bad eating disorder and there are those
people
 who do not do any physical workout in daily routine..I would like to say nothing is more than human's
life
 . It is their real strength. It's only
people
's hand to look after their
health
 .
Health
 is the real wealth
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