In multi-cultural societies, people of different cultural backgrounds live and work together. Do you think the advantages of multi-cultural societies outweigh the disadvantages?

Individuals of different
beliefs
and customs live and work together, in multi-cultural
societies
. In my opinion, I think the benefits of multi-cultural
societies
outweigh any disadvantages that they can bring.
To begin
with, one major advantage of a society with
people
from different backgrounds is an opportunity to appreciate other
beliefs
.
In other words
,
people
can learn and understand why
people
behave in certain ways if they are always in the same community.
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Consequently
,
people
will be
intergrated
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integrated
as they will value different opinions brought from various cultures due to the knowledge acquired.
For example
, I know have an understanding of Moslem dressing and
thus
I
accomodate
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accommodate
their views in every aspect
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of their background. Despite the above advantage, I believe there is a
possiblity
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possibility
of disagreements in multi-cultural
societies
.
This
is
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because
, it is difficult to come to a
concensus
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consensus
when individuals have
diffirent
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different
beliefs
and values.
For instance
, in a
work place
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where
people
with
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religious background ,
particulary
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particularly
Moslems and Christians, need to have the same code of dressing.
Such
will be near impossible as these groups dress completely different.
However
, in these
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people
need to compromise and come up with
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possible solution, especially if they understand each
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background as mentioned above. In conclusion, understanding and appreciating various
beliefs
and customs in multi-cultural
societies
outweigh the drawback of possible disagreements that might rise up.
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