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Global warming is one of the biggest threats humans face in the 21st Century, and sea levels are continuing to rise at alarming rates. What problems are associated with this and what are some possible solutions.

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Climate change is among the greatest dangers
hungmans
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humans
facein
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face in
face
this
 century, and ocean
levels
 keep increasing dramatically.
This
 essay will discuss
about
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the problems and come up with some possible solutions to them. The main problem caused by
the
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global warming are temperature rises, increased fire threat,… The forests will be burnt by the high temperature of the earth.
Then
, the
trees
 decreased after the fire and we won’t have enough
trees
 to do the photosynthesis; animals’ habitats in the forest would be destroyed. The rise in global temperature
also
 causes rising sea
levels
. The ocean
levels
 will rise as the
water
 gets warmer. When the ocean
levels
 rise, the land
wil
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will
 become less and less.
That is
 worrying because
the
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population growth has become a big problem. Growing
trees
 and reducing
water
 waste are the possible solutions to these problems.
For example
, you can use rice
water
 to
water
 the plants and you can plant
trees
 around the house to make our earth greener and the
trees
also
 make
you
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 house more beautiful. In conclusion, global warming is a great danger to human. We have to take action to minimize these problems.
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