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In developing countries, some people believe that their government should introduce new technology to people in order to improve their quality of life. Others believe that offering free education would be more advantageous in the long term. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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A group of persons reckons that ruling authorities should come up with the latest
technology
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 for us to escalate our way of
life
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 in the positive direction whereas other masses believe that
government
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 should provide free
education
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 to everyone which is a positive development in the long term vision for the progressing countries. I gravitate to the idea of providing free learning and explain my prospects with suitable examples in the upcoming paragraphs.
To begin
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 with, introducing new
technology
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, which improves
people
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's quality of
life
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 is one of the ideas for only the wealthiest
people
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, and poverty-stricken
people
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 do not find any benefits from
such
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 development which become useless in the developing countries.
This
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 can be simplified by saying that if the
government
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 comes up with the latest
technology
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 for their
people
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 but a majority of
people
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 unable to cope with these changes because they are in lack
education
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. To illustrate, Bihar a state of India, where
government
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 should take steps for improving
people
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's quality of
life
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, but poor
people
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 can not aid from it, and
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 ideas only help the richest
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 of
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 state.
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, the gap between poor and rich become widen due to
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 development. In majorities of underdeveloped countries, nowadays,
education
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 is imperative in everyone's
life
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. If
government
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 yields the free
education
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then
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this
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 is an excellent step towards making a literate society and narrowing the gap between the poor and the rich in the coming future.
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, if more
people
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 educate from the free
education
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 scheme
then
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 economically deprived
people
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 can have opportunities to educate themselves.
This
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 is exemplified by the
government
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 of Kerala confers
education
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 free of cost to their
people
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that is
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 why the poor
people
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 can have a chance to educate and make their
life
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 better for living.
Moreover
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,
education
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 provides an opportunities to get employment, and if everyone has a job
then
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 without introducing new
technology
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people
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 can improve their quality of
life
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. To conclude, improving
people
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's way of
life
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 can not be achieved only by introducing new
technology
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.
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, It can be accomplished by educating
people
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 freely which would be more beneficial in the long term because educated
people
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 can find a way to live a better
life
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 by obtaining new
technology
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.
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