Some people believe that children's leisure activities must be educational, otherwise they completely waste of time. Do you agree or disagree?

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Children

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the buds for every

nation's

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. Entertainment is the primary relaxation for everyone. Some people opine that toddler

freetime

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free time

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activities must be studies oriented. If they do not do these kinds of entertainment, it will not worthful. I strongly disagree with

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statement. Because child period is the best period of our life. So we can enjoy that. On the one hand, There are many reasons for

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, Below 10 age group of people have more energy to learn any things. so, we do not force them.

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, outdoor games are most helpful to children get physically fit automatically. It means

now a days

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education systems are giving

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to pupils in order to

study

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tons of subject.

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, according to the research,

child

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the child

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would not like to go to school

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then

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ever before. Because they are thinking school looks like a jail.

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our society focus only

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on academic

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achievement. Even recognized. No one

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and developed

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their children

extra curricular

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extracurricular

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activities. Now- a -days parents are like a company supervisor. Because they

are always instruct

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to their babies which is

study

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and

study

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addition

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some parents do not allow

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their kids any other activity without education. To conclude,

Education

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education

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the

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fundamental need for everyone.

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, no one

force

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to do. In my point of

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, we can

study

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only

study

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time

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school and

tution

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tuition

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other

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free time we should encourage to student do anything their wish.

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Varied vocabulary

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