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some people believed that the age limit for the drivers should be increased to ensure road safety. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is often argued that the state should control and carry out
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instead
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 of private sectors.
This
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 essay completely agrees with the statement because of national risk and uncontrolled pricing from the private
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, scientific researches could be easily stolen and possess a huge risk to a nation.
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, these studies would be safer in government hands as they are well trained to store them.
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, the private
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 or some employees for want of money may leak out sensitive details to other countries.
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, the Indian government had done
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 on living in difficult landscapes in Kashmir and measures to improve the conditions, which was stolen by some terrorist outfits.
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, terrorists were unable to decode it as it was encrypted by the Indian Secret Service, and these services could never be affordable by private sector
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.
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, private firms would demand a hefty price from the public, once the
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 is carried out.
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,these firms patent these products and sell for price on their wish.
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, the vaccine for covid 19, was developed by Serum Institute, a private pharmaceutical, in India. ,
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, it took all the benefits and support from the Ministry, later priced it in
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 a way that the poor public couldn't afford it, and the shots were exported to developed countries.
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 would not have happened if India had done the trials herself. in conclusion, as giving free hand to private
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 for
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 would be a risky affair for a country and huge prices for the end product, it is always better
that
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than
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 the governmental bodies should try and regulate the researches.

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