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It is too expensive to look after and repair old building .Tho money should spend on building new modern buildings instead .To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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Introduction
It is argued that redoing the old structures
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is
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 too costly to maintain
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instead
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, instead
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 the new ones should be built.
This
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 testament disagrees with
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 statement. I believe that historic buildings should be protected as
it
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they
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mirrors
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mirror
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 the image of ancient heritage. The forthcoming paragraphs
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 shed light on my standpoint with apt specimens and justifications.
Body paragraph 1
To begin
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 with, maintenance of ancient architecture is significant because it serves the economic aspect of a country and earns a nation a huge sum on
yearly
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 basis, as a huge number of tourists turn up every year to visit
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 places.
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, Tajmahal is considered one of the oldest structures of India and is one of
seven
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the seven
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 wonders of the world. It is estimated that around 7 to 8 million travellers visit
to see
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such
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 a wonderful place throughout the year.
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,
this
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 Indian wonder
vaguely
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employs around 5,000 workers to maintain
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 a place, so it serves a lucrative purpose for the government.
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,
it is clear
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that
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why
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 properties should be taken care of.
Body paragraph 2
Furthermore
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, another important reason to repair them is that
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 places are considered to be the landmark of history which depicts a specific time
of
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in
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 history.
Such
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 palaces provide a learning curve to archaeologists
as well as
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 to the students of arts and society.
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, a study depicts the reason behind the extinction of
Maya
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the Maya
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civilization
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civilisation
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 and helped to learn the world-famous Maya calendar
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;
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 a few remains of Maya structures are still protected.
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, the existence of history books that
teaches
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teach
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 a lot about humans was written with the help of
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 buildings, so
,
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 it is apparent
that
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how important it is for society to preserve
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 establishments.
Conclusion
To conclude
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, ancient buildings not only
provides
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provide
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 economic growth but
also
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helps
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help
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 us to learn a lot about our ancestors and how everything around us has evolved. So, it becomes the responsibility of both
government
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the government
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 and its citizens to put their best foot forward to preserve
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 valuable places.

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task
Your view is clear and you give reasons with examples.
coherence
Link ideas more clearly. Start each paragraph with a short topic sentence and use simpler connectors to show order.
grammar
Check grammar and word choice. Use simple grammar and avoid long, hard phrases. Some facts need checking.
strength
A clear position with reasons and examples.
strength
Use of real-life examples (Taj Mahal) to back points.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • historical significance
  • cultural heritage
  • renovation
  • restoration
  • architectural value
  • environmentally friendly
  • community identity
  • cost efficiency
  • sustainable development
  • unique character
  • sense of place
  • long-term maintenance
  • modern construction
  • initial costs
  • economic benefits
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