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Some people think traveling abroad is a valuable experience for young people. Others think it wastes too much time and expense. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #wastes #time #expense
Nowadays,a section of society believes that travelling to other countries is beneficial with more knowledge of regional experiences by the younger generation .
While
 others argue that it is
time
-consuming and costly.In my opinion,I believe that travelling has more benefits and should be encouraged.I shall examine both shades of
this
 in the following paragraphs. On
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 side,most
people
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spending
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 a lot of money on accommodation and their
time
 travelling.
In addition
, there is a delay in the duration of hours in travelling to their destinations.
For example
,my brother booked his international travel to the UK,
therefore
 his
fight
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 reporting
time
 was 10 am. He finished his checking around 10.15am, The flight was
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 for 3 hours to take off.He has a connection fight at Delhi airport which
also
 delays for 1 hour.
Therefore
 he loses his half-day payment on his stay for bookings and he reaches his destination with a delay of 3 to 4 hours after
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 waiting
time
 in airports. On the other side, they can experience Survival skills
along with
 travelling in order to sustain life in any type of natural environment.
whereas
 it enhances communication with
people
 around the world and increases the self-thinking and socializing ability with
people
,
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 it helps to learn new languages and to discover the unseen areas.For
instances
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, I travelled to Mysore to visit tourist attractions,the native language is Kanada. which is new
for
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me.I completed My ten days stay in the city,
due to
 the wide range of command with speaking other languages. So
the
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communication became easy with native speakers with
help
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 of another language.
As a result
,I gained some information
out of
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 my journey
along with
 a new language skill set and survival lessons. In conclusion,
people
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 their money on travelling without valuing their
time
.
However
,travelling helps
the
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young
people
 to gain knowledge and they can obtain more Survival skills in the earliest, out of their journey
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 a positive effect in my opinion.
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