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An increasing number of people are buying what they need online • What are the advantages and disadvantages of both Indivisual and companies for shopping online

#people #companies
a person likes to shop a lot these days but a busy schedule is a prominent problem, in
order
 to avoid
this
 they like to shop online.
this
 new way is hassle-free as well as time-saving.
although
, the delivery of the product takes time once an
order
 was placed. in the
next
 ,paragraphs we will try to examine the positive and negative impacts of online shopping. let us discuss the positive factors of shopping online where an individual can buy anything even if it is not available in its native place.
although
, internet connectivity has increased since an individual got more inclined towards online platforms. even though demand is elevated in past years but quality remains a concern for customers.
for instance
, an individual ordered a pair of shoes whereas the delivered product was a duplicate copy of the original one. there are some demerits on the company side even if they refuse to acknowledge any one of them. the public is curious but the company rules as they refuse to give a refund for certain items. duplicate products are
also
 sold online until anyone complains about the items sold. it is advised to buy items after an individual is satisfied with the given description of products. amount deduction is justified provided that they give money back in the
next
 48 hours once the
order
 is cancelled.
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 am in the opinion that customers need to become more aware in
order
 to safeguard their consumer rights as mentioned in the law. companies need to improve their service but check and balances are required. grievance address unit should be compulsory unless they work freely to solve customer problems. consumers should be empowered but avoid any illegal activities performed by them.
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