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Some people like to travel with a companion. Other people prefer to travel alone. Which do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your choice.

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Nowadays, more and more people like travelling. Some like
go
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to go
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 alone. Others like
go
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to go
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 with a
companion
. In my opinion, I would prefer
travel
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to travel
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 with a
companion
in
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for
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 many reasons below.
Firstly
, travelling with a
companion
 is happier than travelling alone. I can easily have many beautiful photos. A
companion
 who travels with me is the closest friends. I have
friend
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a friend
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in
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on
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 a trip
whom
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with whom
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 I share
the
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apply
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happiness, the sadness
with
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apply
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.
For example
, when coming to a beautiful place, I need
friend
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a friend
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 to take photos for me with wonderful pictures. We can eat the same food, sleeping together and have unforgettable memories.
Secondly
, one problem when I travelling is finance. Bringing friend travelling with me
also
 saves my money. Travelling with a
group
, I may pay a part of the whole fee, we share the fee together. I think, travelling with a
companion
 bring a bit
benefit
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of benefit
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.
For example
, going in a
group
also
 helps reduce the price of visiting a lot of places because there are usually programs in which they reduce the price for many people in a
group
. The
last
 one is safety. Going in a
group
also
 brings
the
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a
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 safe feeling. When someone is at risk or have any problem,
companion
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a companion
the companion
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 can help me to solve the problem. Without support from each
members
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member
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, we could get lost or be in a lot of complicated tasks. In conclusion, travelling with a
group
 always brings me unforgettable memory that makes every
trips
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trip
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 of mine become worthwhile.
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