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Some people believe that countries should produce the food to feed their population themselves and import as little as possible. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #countries #food #population #import
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globalization gradually promotes
people
 to import foods from other
countries
.
However
, many
people
 argue that
countries
 should provide
people
 with their own-produced groceries mainly
instead
 of relying on importing from overseas. In my
opinoin
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opinion
, I disagree that
countries
 ought to offer their local food but neglect the importance of foreign
products
. I
iwll
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will
 discuss both views and support my opinion.
First
 of all, it is vital for individuals to shop freely and have more options
on
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 shopping. It might be a drawback for consumers if
shop
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the shop
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 only
focus
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focuses
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 on domestic food. Not only
do
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does
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 shopping become dull and boring but
also
 the markets lost
its
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their
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 diversity on the
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shelf
shelves
shelfs
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shelves
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.
Furthermore
,
people
 have no longer enjoy the happiness
on
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 shopping overseas
products
 without
traveling
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 miles away if we reduce the imported items.
People
 can only procure exotic fruits or vegetables that have difficulty
to plant
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 in their
countries
 by spending more money on
traveling
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 abroad.
On the other hand
, some
people
 claim that
countries
 should offer more domestic
goods
 to
people
 and turn down a number of
interntional
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international
products
, which I am afraid that I disagree
.
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However
, it might protect the local farmers if we focus on producing local food. Local farmers might survive from the global competitive prices.
Moreover
, it might protect the environment if we reduce imported
goods
. Local foods travel shorter delivery distance compared to foreign
goods
.
Therefore
, local foods
achive
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achieve
archive
the
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decarbonization. To sum up, both local
products
 and imported
goods
 have their advantages.
However
, I believe that it is significant for
countries
 to introduce some overseas
products
 for their community.
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