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More and more people today are using computers and electronic devices to access information. Thus, there is no longer any need to print newspapers, books, or magazines. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Computers
 and books both have found their niche and audience in today's world.
Computers
 are more prevalent in urban areas and at the same time, newspapers find their subscribers in
rural
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a rural
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 region, where
computers
 have not found their feet yet.
Therefore
, I believe it is incorrect to say that newspapers have become redundant. In the below paragraphs, we will discuss the relevance and significance of both mediums to obtain knowledge. To commence with, the usage of
computers
 and electronic gadgets
such
 as tablets has mushroomed in cosmopolitan cities and societies. One major reason for
this
 swift change in nature, to assimilate information through
such
 devices, is that
people
 are far more involved in their work, they hardly find some buffer time to access information.
Thus
, they started utilizing
computers
 for daily learning requirements, because it is much more convenient as
people
 can click and scroll to gain the data they want to absorb.
Moreover
, it is environmentally friendly,
therefore
 decreasing the burden of cutting trees on nature. Simultaneously, it is easy to carry anywhere across the world as
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 of
e books
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 can be carried in one single device.
On the other hand
, In
rural
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 region, the main source of gaining information is still through news dailies and novels.
People
 often socialize with their friends in a community place over a piece of news they gathered over the day.
Secondly
, many
people
 are resistant to shift to electronic medium because they are oblivious to electronic usage. There is a certain section in
urban
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 area as well despite being tech-savvy they still accumulate their knowledge through newspapers. In conclusion, Inferring from
above
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 paragraphs, both print and electronic mediums have their strongholds.
However
, in the imminent future electronic media will become more prevalent in villages as the technology evolves.
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