Some people think that children should aim to their best at what they are doing while others believe it is not necessary for them. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

There are ongoing debates on whether the child should have a realistic goal to aim for what they are doing. Some people might think that

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is significant for their life because they will have

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clear pathway and they will try harder and do everything to get it.,

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some other citizens believe that it is not compulsory having a goal to get something. in

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both views and

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ultimately agree with the

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opinion for the following reasons.

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with a strong desire for success will be

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great person in the

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.It is clearly pictured if

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have an ambition

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young age,

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will develop

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confidence, as well skills and

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will become more productive.Parents will be a big help in achieving his goal.For ,example a 3-year-old boy wants to learn a piano. He has a talent and eagerness to learn it, with the help of his parents, he devotes his time practising, through his patience and perseverance he

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it and now he has the confidence to perform on a stage.Another example is when a youngster wants to be a doctor like his father.He has a strong ambition to be a doctor someday so he strives harder in his academic skills and practical skills later on he becomes a surgeon doctor. On the other ,hand some people believe that

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do not need a strong desire for everything that they are doing because they think it can make them suffer from stress and

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is not good for their health, on the

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contrary if the young generation does not have specific ambition, they will make themselves lazy and no direction for his life and there will be no bright

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it is better to have a realistic goal in

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of what they are doing because it will develop their sense of responsibility and confidence as well as they will have a good

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, whilst the

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having no aim will become an unresponsible person and lazy in the

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