Some people think money is one of the most essential factors in promoting hapinness. Do you think people can be happy without much money? What other factors contribute towards happiness?

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It is true that money plays an indispensable role in every individual's existence, which helps them find happiness. In my opinion, people cannot remain in a happy state without money, as life becomes quite challenging without it.
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, having peace and sublime health are the two aspects which makes one live with merriment.
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with, being financially stable is of paramount importance because without it human survival becomes quite burdensome. The reason for
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is that without proper finances carrying out menial tasks,
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as doing groceries, buying clothes, paying bills and so on, becomes immensely .
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, a citizen starts relying on relatives and parents for financial aid.
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, if being contingent on family and friends continue for longer periods, a person may eventually lose their identity and begin to have radical thoughts.
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, it was recently reported in the Times of India newspaper that a doctor, who was the sole bread earner of his family, attempted suicide after failing to provide monetary support to his wife and children. There are,
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, two aspects that are considered to be a blessing and bring about immense pleasure. The
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one is health, if a person is healthy, they can easily overcome any obstacles they face during their lifetime.
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, being sick or handicap may deprive them of leading a normal lifestyle. Another factor is peace, there are many underprivileged who can barely afford a one-time meal, but are leading a peaceful life, while there are others who hail from an affluent family
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under depression. Taking celebrities as an example, seven out of ten actors and actresses undergo rehabilitation to overcome anxiety and to find tranquillity. In conclusion, I believe that having funds is imperative, for one would not be able to act freely and every trivial
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become distressing if they do not possess it.
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, having sound health and peaceful life brings copious satisfaction to human beings.
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