Children are becoming overweight and unhealthy. Some people think that the government should have the responsibility. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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are becoming overweight and unhealthy. Some people think that the government should have the responsibility.To a certain extent, I agree that the authorities need to be in charge of

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trend, I believe that individuals ought to be responsible for the negative tendency. On the one hand, I would agree that the government should have the responsibility for

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phenomenon. In the other words, the

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mostly stay at home like animals in the zoo.

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of taking outdoor activities, they spend a lot of time watching shows on television or playing online games on their personal computer.

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, the authorities may have not a lot of health

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operations for kids. The curriculum of many schools

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mainly focus on mathematics or natural science subjects whereas the

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of healthy subjects are neglected. Alternatively, I

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think that the accountability of parents is locked out of

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trend.

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, adults shape their unhealthy eating habits for their kids by making use of junk and fast foods for their

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daily

dishes.

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,

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are prone to be

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as those foods cause contain a large number of sugar and fats which leads to

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more

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weight.

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, the unacceptable sleeping habits of the parents has a gloomy impact

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their

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. Specifically, adults keep their eyes glued to

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of

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devices for several hours in lieu of communicating with their

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.

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causes the problem that kids are able to imitate

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undesirable behaviour and spend

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a lot of time on smart devices

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suffer from eye diseases. In conclusion, it is certainly true that the responsibility of the government in the increase of overweight

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is evident, but

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is no by means that of parents is overlooked.