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Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and poluttion problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree? What other measures fdo you think might be effective?

Many people believe that increasing the price of petrol is the best way to tackle growing
traffic
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 and pollution problems. I partly agree with
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 idea because,
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 higher fuel costs can reduce car usage to some extent, other long-term measures are far more effective in addressing these issues.
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 with, raising petrol prices can discourage people from driving unnecessarily.
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, commuters may start using public transport, carpooling, or even cycling to save money.
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 change in behaviour can help reduce both
traffic
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 congestion and air pollution.
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,
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 approach
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 has serious downsides.
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, it can burden low- and middle-income individuals who rely on personal vehicles for work or daily activities.
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,
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this
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 measure might be effective in the short term, it is neither fair nor sustainable in the long run.
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, governments can adopt more practical and inclusive solutions.
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, improving the quality and accessibility of public transportation would naturally encourage people to use it
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 of private cars.
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, promoting the use of electric vehicles through tax reductions and charging infrastructure could significantly cut emissions.
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, urban policies
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 as car-free zones, better cycling paths, and encouraging remote work can help reduce
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 pressure in cities. These combined actions, unlike fuel price hikes, address the root causes rather than just the symptoms. In conclusion,
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 increasing petrol prices may bring some temporary relief from
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 and pollution, it is not a complete solution. Ultimately, a balanced approach — involving improved public transport, eco-friendly technology, and smart city planning — is the most effective and equitable way to deal with these modern urban challenges.

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coherence
Be clear on one main note in each part. Make sure every paragraph shows one idea that links to the question.
content
Add a few simple facts or data to back up your points. This will make the argument stronger.
coherence
Use small link words to show cause and effect and to show contrast. This will help flow.
language
Check spelling and grammar, and keep long sentences short.
content
Good view and balance. It turns well to both sides of the issue.
structure
Clear structure with proper start and end. Good use of signpost words like 'To begin with', 'However', 'In conclusion'.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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