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Sports and exercise classes with more academic seasons. what is your opinion on this change how how this change will affect children's life in your view? Give reason for your answer and include any relevant examples for your own experience and knowledge

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Sports
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 and physical workouts
is
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 very important for kids. Both of these puts
impact
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an impact
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 on their life
with
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in
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 many ways. In upcoming
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, there are some reasons and related example of
this
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 topic will
diccuss
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discuss
 and expands with some
explaination
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explanation
 as well. There are some benefits of
games
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 to
students
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 in
thier
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their
the
 present life as well in long term.
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,
its
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 teaches
disicpline
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discipline
 to them. As all
games
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 have
own
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their own
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 rules and regulations to play, Players have to follow them strictly .
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,
this
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 practice creates a
dicpline
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discipline
decline
 in
thier
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their
 studies and later
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 helps in their jobs.
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, most of
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time
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 companies leader fond of
sports
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 and they
also
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 played
same
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the same
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 in the past. They accepted that it helps them to
self control
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at
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apply
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many
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any
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time
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 in office.
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,
sports
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also
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 creates leadership and kindness quality in
students
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. Every game has a captain who leads the team and gives direction
on
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time
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 to
time
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.
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 process helps to
built
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 leadership quality that will open many chances for them to become a leader in
job related
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 projects and other fields.
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games
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 play
vital
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a vital
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 role in teenagers life to established them as
a
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apply
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successful student,
empolyee
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employee
 , and employer as well.
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,
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apply
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games
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 are important for moral value,
Exercise
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 needs
for
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apply
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body and mental fitness. As
obestiy
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obesity
 in kids inclines,
lacks
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the lacks
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of
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apply
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exercise
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 is
main
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the main
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 reason behind it. If physical activities like
,
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 yoga, jogging, and all kinds of physical training will start in school, children will join them to entertain and it will help to reduce
overweight
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the overweight
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 of fatty
students
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.
Moreover
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, it is
scitific
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scientific
 proven fact that physical
activites
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activities
activity
 helps to reduce educational stress and other mental problems. So, all schools must
takes
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initiative
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the initiative
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 of
exercise
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 for
betterment
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the betterment
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 of
students
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 physical and mental health. In conclusion, both
sports
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 and
exercise
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is
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are
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 important for
student
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the student
a student
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 to develop moral values and to relax and healthy lifestyle.

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