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Some people think that old buildings should be nocked down and give way to the new buildings. To what extent do you agree or disagree

#people #buildings
In general, every property has its own lifespan and value. New
buildings
 need to replace the old ones for developing the surrounding in order to suit
people
's generations and lifestyles
although
 maintaining old constructions is another choice of cultural's conservation.  It cannot be denied that
buildings
 must change while becoming dilapidated. It is an acceptable and understandable decision but some new
buildings
 are constructed for nothing.
Similarly
, if
people
 destroy all of the ancient constructions, the old traditions Trent to die respectively. Even if some of them may be located in the improper area, it is not better if
people
 just shift or adjust them,
consequently
 they still have a modern city with a unique attraction. 
However
, old constructions are important archaeological or architectural values, it might be integral to the culture and be a symbol of a city or
country
. Demolition of
such
 building may cause serious damages to cultural and traditional institutions.
Therefore
, the population needs to remain and maintain
this
 traditional construction of
people
 in a
further
 decade.
Moreover
, these kinds of the building can be referred to the ancestors of
people
 in each
country
.
In addition
, ancient
buildings
 are the best attraction for either domestic tourists and foreign tourists which might generate an income for the
country
. In conclusion, even though ancient
buildings
 are old and unusable, they are uniqueness thing of each city or
country
, they are the other main source of income for their particular area. In my opinion,
people
 should proud and conserve these
buildings
 not only for their children but
also
 for their society.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Heritage conservation
  • Historical edifice
  • Cultural legacy
  • Architectural marvel
  • Preservationist
  • Urban landscape
  • Economic revitalization
  • Tourist hub
  • Adaptive reuse
  • Cultural fabric
  • Aesthetic appeal
  • Environmental sustainability
  • Civic identity
  • Preservation criteria
  • Structural integrity
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