More and more people want to own items, such as cars, clothing and other things, that are made by famous brands. What are the reasons for this? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

Shopping has become more accessible than it has ever been.
As a result
,
people
have access to more brands and companies that produce luxury
items
. Owning products from a well-known producer have become important to express a person's belief and portray their lifestyle.
This
has led
people
to buy more vehicles, apparel and unique
items
from reputed brands.
To begin
with, maintaining our status in society is becoming more vital and individuals do it in different forms. One of the factors that help them to display their taste and status is by spending money on merchandise produced by famous companies.
This
helps to show others the extent of money they have to spend on luxury
items
including automobiles, jewellery and fashion.
Additionally
,
people
believe that well-known brands manufacture have
better
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quality of products as compared to local or generic
items
in the market.
For example
, most
of
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the
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people
would rather purchase branded jeans from Levis than shopping at their local retail store. To my mind,
migration
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of
people
towards specific organisations and establishments has had a negative impact on the economy and our society. Owning
items
from these establishments has resulted in a drop
of
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revenue for local vendors.
As a result
, local businesses are struggling to remain open and serve the community.
Furthermore
, with lack of competition necessary things
such
as clothing and personal care
items
price will increase as there will be no homegrown alternative. To conclude, purchasing branded goods can lead to a monopoly and paralyze the consumer goods market.
People
need to invest in the neighbourhood stores so that the big labels cannot dominate and the prices are not inflated for
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consumer goods.
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