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According to some people spending a lot of money on marriage parties is a must. Others insist that lavish celebrations are a waste of money and resources. Both views will be discussed in this essay; however, in my opinion, it does not make much sense to spend a lot of money on celebrations.

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Marriage
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 is the most important ceremony for each person
life
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.
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 is the turning point of our
life
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.
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, a few
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amount
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amounts
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 of
people
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 are being
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suspended
spended
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spent
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ahuge
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a huge
huge
amount
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 of
money
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 on their wedding and parties is a must. Others stand firm that
celebration
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are
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is
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waste
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a waste
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 of
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moeny
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money
 and resources.
However
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, I will
dicuss
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discuss
 both
view points
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viewpoints
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 and my opinion about
this
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 no need to spend a vast
amount
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 of
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moeny
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money
 on celebrations. On the
one
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 hand, there are many reasons to parties is unavoidable things in nowadays lifestyle.
Firstly
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,
marriage
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 is not a small function.
this
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 is the turning point of our
life
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. So we are
spenting
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spending
one
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 time a large
amount
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 of
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moeny
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money
 on functions. Because
people
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 would like to invite tons of
people
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 to their wedding so we have a responsibility to satisfied to
coming
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a coming
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 person
such
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 as
variety
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a variety
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 of food.
Moreover
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, nowadays all things price are expensive compare than ever before. so we
must
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just
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spent
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spend
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 more
money
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 without reason.
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, rich
people
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 are showed their status
infront
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in front
 of others
such
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 as mass
marriage
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 celebrations.
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, a famous rich person who
Mr.
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Mr
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 Mugesh
ambani
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Ambani
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 and he is
a
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an
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 Indian
business man
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businessman
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. He was spending almost five crores
Indian
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of Indian
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 rupees
to
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on
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 their daughter
marriage
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.
On the other hand
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,
money
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 is
most
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the most
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 significant factor in
this
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 modern era.
marriage
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 is a most important
day
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 no doubt about it. Even though, we do not need to
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spend
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a
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apply
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mass level
money
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such
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posh
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a posh
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celebration
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.
This
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 luxurious
celebration
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are
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is
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waste
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a waste
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 of our entire saving
money
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 as well as resources
such
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 as
waste
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the waste
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 of tons of flowers and etc. Some
celebrtaion
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celebration
celebrations
 are creating
an
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air pollution
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 as enormous cracker blast. To conclude, in my
ipinion
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opinion
 about
this
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 statement we do not need to spend
huge
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the huge
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 level
amount
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 of
money
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 and resources on
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one
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one-day
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day
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celebration
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.
Besides
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, we can do simple
marriage
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 without
spent
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spending
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 a lot of
amount
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 in order to we could save
large
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a large
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amount
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. There fore, we are able to live a happy and
satisfied
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satisfying
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life
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.
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Further more
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Furthermore
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,
money
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are
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is
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 not making happiness and celebrations are making
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one
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one-day
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day
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 happiness. we spend more
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moeny
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money
 on
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one
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one-day
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day
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 parties others remaining days are continuously running to earn
money
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 without
take
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 a relax.

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