According to some people spending a lot of money on marriage parties is a must. Others insist that lavish celebrations are a waste of money and resources. Both views will be discussed in this essay; however, in my opinion, it does not make much sense to spend a lot of money on celebrations.

Marriage
is the most important ceremony for each person
life
.
This
is the turning point of our
life
.
However
, a few
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of
people
are being
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suspended
spended
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ahuge
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a huge
huge
amount
of
money
on their wedding and parties is a must. Others stand firm that
celebration
are
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waste
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a waste
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of
moeny
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money
and resources.
However
, I will
dicuss
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discuss
both
view points
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viewpoints
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and my opinion about
this
no need to spend a vast
amount
of
moeny
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money
on celebrations. On the
one
hand, there are many reasons to parties is unavoidable things in nowadays lifestyle.
Firstly
,
marriage
is not a small function.
this
is the turning point of our
life
. So we are
spenting
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spending
one
time a large
amount
of
moeny
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money
on functions. Because
people
would like to invite tons of
people
to their wedding so we have a responsibility to satisfied to
coming
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a coming
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person
such
as
variety
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a variety
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of food.
Moreover
, nowadays all things price are expensive compare than ever before. so we
must
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just
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spent
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more
money
without reason.
In addition
, rich
people
are showed their status
infront
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in front
of others
such
as mass
marriage
celebrations.
For example
, a famous rich person who
Mr.
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Mugesh
ambani
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and he is
a
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Indian
business man
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. He was spending almost five crores
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of Indian
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rupees
to
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their daughter
marriage
.
On the other hand
,
money
is
most
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significant factor in
this
modern era.
marriage
is a most important
day
no doubt about it. Even though, we do not need to
spent
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spend
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a
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apply
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mass level
money
such
as
posh
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a posh
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celebration
.
This
luxurious
celebration
are
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is
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waste
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a waste
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of our entire saving
money
as well as resources
such
as
waste
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the waste
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of tons of flowers and etc. Some
celebrtaion
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celebration
celebrations
are creating
an
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air pollution
such
as enormous cracker blast. To conclude, in my
ipinion
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opinion
about
this
statement we do not need to spend
huge
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the huge
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level
amount
of
money
and resources on
one
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one-day
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day
celebration
.
Besides
, we can do simple
marriage
without
spent
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spending
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a lot of
amount
in order to we could save
large
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a large
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amount
. There fore, we are able to live a happy and
satisfied
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life
.
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,
money
are
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is
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not making happiness and celebrations are making
one
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one-day
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day
happiness. we spend more
moeny
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money
on
one
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one-day
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day
parties others remaining days are continuously running to earn
money
without
take
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a relax.
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