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some people believe that the internet has brought people closer together by making world smaller. others disagree, claiming that the internet has made people and communities more isolated because they no longer need to leave home and interact with others. Discuss both the view and give your opinion.

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this
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 is a boon for all
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. After the invention of
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technology, irrefutably,
people
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 are gotten more benefit from
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.a fair amount of
people
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 think that network has been brought
people
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 very close together by creating global shorter.
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, others decline and claim that
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 and society
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 been made
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 from each other the main reason for
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. Because they do not like to go outside and communicate with others. I will discuss both the view and
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 I would give my personal opinion about
this
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 statement. On the one hand, there are many advantages
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 having
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in
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nowadays.
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, we can explore
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around the
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 without going to
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another country
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.
this
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 is
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 positive development.
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, social media is given more benefit to
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 and we can get any news from any nation within a fraction of
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.
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,
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 has reduced our working time and energy in order to we could save more time.
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,
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 connection is helped to communicate with other parts of the
world
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people
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 and we are able to understand and learn
foreign
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 culture , tradition, values and etc.
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,
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pandemic
 situation most education institutions are introduced online education for their student not only the home country students but
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.
On the other hand
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, negativity can not be ignored. there are many disadvantages too.
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 is made
distance
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 from one person to another person even within a family. Because they would not like to talk to others.
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, nowadays
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 mostly addicted to
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internet
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 connection especially
youngesters
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youngsters
.
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 they always
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isolate
isolated
from
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themselves from
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 folks and society.
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, they do not need to talk
because
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 all entertainment available
in
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.
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,
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 is killed more
people
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 time in order to they are addicted by continuously using.
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according
 to the recent survey said that more than 95% of
people
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 using
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everyday
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 for different kinds of purpose to
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around
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. To
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conclude
,
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 is a most
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inevitable
 factor for
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these days
people
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 lifestyle. Without
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doubt
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 there are many pros and cons. In my opinion
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 is made
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world
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 very short even nowadays we have
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world
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the world
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 in our hand
such
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 as smart mobiles.
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 fore,
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 is always best for our modern lifestyle and we can not
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ignored
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servive
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service
 is unavoidable for every sector
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, education, business and etc.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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