some people believe that the internet has brought people closer together by making world smaller. others disagree, claiming that the internet has made people and communities more isolated because they no longer need to leave home and interact with others. Discuss both the view and give your opinion.

In
this
modern era,
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is a boon for all
people
. After the invention of
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technology, irrefutably,
people
are gotten more benefit from
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.a fair amount of
people
think that network has been brought
people
very close together by creating global shorter.
However
, others decline and claim that
people
and society
has
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been made
distance
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from each other the main reason for
internet
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. Because they do not like to go outside and communicate with others. I will discuss both the view and
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I would give my personal opinion about
this
statement. On the one hand, there are many advantages
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having
internet
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in
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nowadays.
Firstly
, we can explore
to
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around the
world
without going to
other country
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.
this
is
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positive development.
Secondly
, social media is given more benefit to
people
such
as creating the contact to around the
global
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and we can get any news from any nation within a fraction of
second
.
Thirdly
,
internet
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has reduced our working time and energy in order to we could save more time.
Finally
,
internet
connection is helped to communicate with other parts of the
world
people
and we are able to understand and learn
foreign
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culture , tradition, values and etc.
For example
,
the
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corona
pandamic
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pandemic
situation most education institutions are introduced online education for their student not only the home country students but
also
overseas students. Students can learn syllabus from
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.
On the other hand
, negativity can not be ignored. there are many disadvantages too.
internet
is made
distance
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from one person to another person even within a family. Because they would not like to talk to others.
Moreover
, nowadays
people
mostly addicted to
the
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internet
connection especially
youngesters
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youngsters
.
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they always
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isolate
isolated
from
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folks and society.
Furthermore
, they do not need to talk
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all entertainment available
in
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internet
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.
In addition
,
internet
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is killed more
people
time in order to they are addicted by continuously using.
For instance
,
accroding
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according
to the recent survey said that more than 95% of
people
using
internet
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everyday
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for different kinds of purpose to
arount
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around
the
world
. To
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conclude
,
internet
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is a most
inevidable
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inevitable
factor for
thesedays
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these days
people
lifestyle. Without
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doubt
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there are many pros and cons. In my opinion
internet
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is made
world
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very short even nowadays we have
world
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the world
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in our hand
such
as smart mobiles.
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fore,
internet
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is always best for our modern lifestyle and we can not
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ignored
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.
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servive
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service
is unavoidable for every sector
such
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, education, business and etc.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
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  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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