Art is considered an important part of society as well as an expression of its culture. Do you think it is important for children to be taught art? Do you think children should be encouraged to focus on art rather than other subjects?

It is argued by some that
art
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society and serves as an expression of its culture.
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essay believes that it is vital for
children
to be taught
art
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because
it can help to develop other important
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.
However
,
children
should not be encouraged to focus on
art
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the expense of other subjects. It is important to teach
art
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a
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young age due to the fact it can lead to the development of several other
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as well.
Art
can turn
children
to be more creative and to
strenghten
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strengthen
their weak areas,
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to build
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elevated self-esteem.
For example
, since my son started to attend drawing lessons, I feel he has become more confident and can express himself more clearly and naturally.
Nevertheless
, in my opinion, it is wrong to
encourge
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encourage
children
to focus on
art
rather than other subjects.
This
is simply
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because
every individual should have the opportunity to develop his or her path in life.
In other words
, in order to become the best version of yourself, you must choose your own way
instead
of being
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to do something
elase
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else
.
For instance
, in the city where I currently live, the local school gives its students the right to focus on their preferred subject, and as a consequence, several highly successful musicians and sportsmen have graduated from that particular school. In conclusion, I strongly believe that
art
should be taught in schools due to its positive effect on the development of other important skills, but,
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the other hand,
children
should have the option to decide on their own preferred subject, in order to fully accomplish their potential.
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