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Some people think it is more important to spend time in developing a successful career while others think it is more important to spend time with friends and family. Discuss both sides and give your opinion

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Most
people
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 believe that
people
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 should utilize their
time
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 to improve the future with success wheres some argued that they should give more
time
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 to friend and family than focusing on
career
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.I do not deny that
people
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 should not spend
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 with loved ones, but giving attention to a successful
career
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 is
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 important. The world has become more challenging than it used to be so
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 nowadays it requires more day to have a successful
career
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.sometimes one can miss golden chance from millisecond,
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, you are preparing for an entrance exam to get admission to the reputed university and because of family function you did not perform on well in your exam would slow down your progress.
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, a successful
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 means a profession that you love and
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 a good amount of money which will give you all facilities that you ever want in life. The life with successful achievement needs to quality of
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. on the other side,some argued that the young generation does not have enough
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 for their family and friends as they are busy building a quality
career
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.To get successful life some
people
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 need to travel internationally for either
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 study or work where they do not get enough
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 to have a meaningful conversation,
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 some
people
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 changed their attitude towards their family and friends when they are becoming a successful person and showing the power of money to their relatives.
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,one who is earning more in the whole family can control overall member. To summarise,
people
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 should contribute their
time
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 to making a better future by staying with their family and colleagues.
people
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 should
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 maintain their attitude with the achievement they are getting.
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