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It has been noted that many people who had a big impact on the world gave themselves completely to their work and did not bother with the idea of “work-life balance”. To what extent should people try to have a good work-life balance? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.

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A lot of people who significantly impacted the world devoted their whole
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 to their
work
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 and did not pay attention to a recently invented term
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work-life
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balance
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. I think that in a modern world it is necessary for everyone to effectively split and manage their
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 because it is highly unlikely that without a proper
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work-life
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balance
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 one will attain high results and become happy.
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 of all, harmony in any sphere of life is essential for staying active and motivated. A jobless person without an engaging challenging job might lose a desire to live as inner energy is not used or wasted on useless activities.
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, it is often noted that people who involved in a job that may change others' lives are happier and more satisfied.
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, without
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, most individuals may feel unsatisfied and depressed.
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, some surveys claim that many young volunteers feel happier than their peers because they see positive results and feedback from their
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.
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, a good
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work-life
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balance
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 prevents some hard-working employees from overwork. Overworking may lead to burnout which is an underrated mental disorder.
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, the number of people facing
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 issue is constantly rising around the globe.
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, if a person properly organizes his
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 and rest hours,
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 problem is highly likely to be avoided.
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, a recent article from Google about the performance of their employees mentioned that workers who passed a specifically designed course about
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 and life
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 significantly increased their productivity. In conclusion, I believe that every person should pay close attention to the
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 spent on
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 and do not neglect their personal
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. I would recommend reading popular literature about
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work-life
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 and integrate the ideas as early as possible.
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