Research indicates that the characteristics we are born with have much more influence on our personality and development than any experiences we may have in our life. Which do you consider to be the major influence?

The characteristics we are born with are considered to impact more on our
personality
than an
experience
which we get in our life.
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, we have a question: which factor is more important in building ourselves. I cannot totally support
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my point of view, these factors are equally important for people and their development. On the one hand,
character
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the character
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is
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part of everyone. In fact, it builds our
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behaviour
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it may not alone help a person to develop
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experience
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knowledge and skills for improving our
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the character
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is
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people different and interesting while the
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helps to
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we stay interesting and unique. In conclusion, there is the opinion that character more participates in
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of our
personality
than
experience
.
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important part of our mental growth.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • nature vs. nurture debate
  • genetic inheritance
  • personality traits
  • behavior patterns
  • heritability
  • twins studies
  • malleable characteristics
  • upbringing
  • environmental influences
  • critical periods
  • language acquisition
  • worldview
  • innate traits
  • personal experiences
  • psychological development
  • epigenetics
  • adaptive behaviors
  • cultural imprinting
  • temperament
  • social conditioning
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