some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime. Discuss this view and give your own opinion

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Some people reckon that we should consider equal punishments for each kind of
crime
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and I think it is not logical to
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passage
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we will discuss
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view in
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of
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approach. Some people may believe that punishing criminals equally and without considering their crimes can be an appropriate approach to deal with offenders. Let's imagine we have faced
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two criminals in
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court;
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first
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person has charged with murder and the
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one has charged with
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. Should we execute both offenders? Or putting them
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prison for
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? Absolutely neither.
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, if we think logically, we will easily found that crimes must be categorized and a judge should judge lawbreakers according to their
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.
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, imagine a country
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same punishment for every offender and lawbreaker. In my opinion,
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idea is versus justice obviously; needless to say, in a country as mentioned above there is no necessity for some occupations to exist and people who were judge or lawyer or had same vocations would be
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and probably they will wash dishes in their houses! So, let me
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opinion. In conclusion, dealing with criminals with fixed punishments for each kind of
crime
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will not a useful approach and
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we should consider their
crime
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and
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we will be able to sentence them to the suit punishment.
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, briefly, I reckon that considering equal punishments for every offender is versus justice actually.
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