The number of people who are interested in and wearing fashionable clothes is increasing. Is this a positive or negative development?

People today pay more attention to their appearance and,
therefore
, prefer to wear fashionable clothes. In my opinion, it has
positive
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influence on the growth of related industries and productions, while some persons suffer from shopping addiction. Continuously increasing demand for beautiful items creates
fertile
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supply. Humans are ready to pay more for well-known luxury brands.
This
money flow allows the factories to enhance their capacity and to employ more workers.
For example
, one of the most popular elite brands in the world is Chanel. They attracted
attention
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the attention
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of many consumers and could increase their market share by 30
percent
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for the
last
5 years.
This
additional profit let them
to
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open
the
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new shops and plants in many countries.
On the other hand
,
rich
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assortment of the commodity provokes difficulties of choice and people
buy
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a lot of probably unnecessary goods
instead
of required.
For example
,
last
time when I had to buy a new office dress I went
to shop
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, saw plenty of stylish clothes, spectacular combinations on mannequins, and could not stop myself on a particular one.
As a result
, I bought several suits.
However
, today I wear the only dress from the purchase and understand that all the rest just lie in a wardrobe.
This
situation is a clear example
when
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women collect useless stuff in
hope
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the hope
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to look trendy. In conclusion, humans’ interests in fashionable looks have
dual
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a dual
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effect. From one side, it helps the industries to prosper, while from the other side, it develops
the
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psychological disease
such
as shopaholism.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Globalization
  • cultural exchange
  • modernity
  • versatility
  • practicality
  • Western media
  • fashion industry
  • widespread adoption
  • professional settings
  • preservation
  • cultural diversity
  • cultural integration
  • cross-cultural understanding
  • unique cultural identities
  • expression of individuality
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