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The number of people who are interested in and wearing fashionable clothes is increasing. Is this a positive or negative development?

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People today pay more attention to their appearance and,
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, prefer to wear fashionable clothes. In my opinion, it has
positive
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 influence on the growth of related industries and productions, while some persons suffer from shopping addiction. Continuously increasing demand for beautiful items creates
fertile
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 supply. Humans are ready to pay more for well-known luxury brands.
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 money flow allows the factories to enhance their capacity and to employ more workers.
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, one of the most popular elite brands in the world is Chanel. They attracted
attention
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 of many consumers and could increase their market share by 30
percent
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 for the
last
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 5 years.
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 additional profit let them
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open
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new shops and plants in many countries.
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,
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 assortment of the commodity provokes difficulties of choice and people
buy
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 a lot of probably unnecessary goods
instead
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 of required.
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,
last
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 time when I had to buy a new office dress I went
to shop
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, saw plenty of stylish clothes, spectacular combinations on mannequins, and could not stop myself on a particular one.
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, I bought several suits.
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, today I wear the only dress from the purchase and understand that all the rest just lie in a wardrobe.
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 situation is a clear example
when
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 women collect useless stuff in
hope
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the hope
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 to look trendy. In conclusion, humans’ interests in fashionable looks have
dual
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a dual
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 effect. From one side, it helps the industries to prosper, while from the other side, it develops
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psychological disease
such
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 as shopaholism.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Globalization
  • cultural exchange
  • modernity
  • versatility
  • practicality
  • Western media
  • fashion industry
  • widespread adoption
  • professional settings
  • preservation
  • cultural diversity
  • cultural integration
  • cross-cultural understanding
  • unique cultural identities
  • expression of individuality
  • innovative
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