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Nowadays the ways people interact with each other has changed because of technology.In what ways technologies affected the types of relationships people make.Has this become a positive or negative development.

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technology
 brings peoples closer to another part of the world, by means of social application
such
 as
imessage
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iMessage
, Facebook and Twitter, it brings smiles to person because they use
this
 as a way of communication with their family and friends.In my ,view
this
 is a positive development in our society.In
this
 ,essay
i
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 will explain what are ways to communicate using
technology
 and how
this
 trend has huge development.
to begin
 with, people today has big advantages over a person living in the past.It is nearly the 20th century when
this
technology
 started.The only communication used in the past was sending mail and poster, that takes a month before they received the mail,
however
 in today's generation, people can use Facebook,
twitter
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, Instagram and even facetime to connect with their love-one By using
this
 kind of
technology
, communication is easy as well as economical. High tech gadgets
such
 as iPhone, tablet and laptop have a great impact on our society.It makes people easily connected to their friends and makes more new acquaintance all over the world.It brings happiness and more closeness to another person Another reason why
this
 machinery has a good improvement is when times of emergency, young generation now can call their parents if they need help and easily give the proper attention that might be needed, as a ,
result
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 it can save a life because of early response to emergencies.Many
family
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families
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 now are more relax and have a sense of satisfaction because of
this
 high
technology
 in transmission. In
conclusion
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 using high
technology
 as one method of connection has surely created a positive development in our nation.
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