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Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes (for example working for a charity, improving the neighborhood or teaching sports to younger children). To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Since
children
 are the future of a nation, some
people
 believe that they should be required to engage in unpaid community
work
 while they are at school and it must
made
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make
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 part of high school curriculum programmes. I completely agree with
above
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 statement, because of the benefits it brings to pupils.
This
 essay will substantiate my opinion in the following paragraph with relevant examples. There are numerous reasons that unpaid
work
 helps
children
 to grow
further
, along with, soft skills as well as activities
are
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 valued by universities and employers.
Firstly
,
Education
 plays a very important role in the lives of
people
, at
earlier
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 age if
children
 do some kind of charity
work
 that will help them to understand what type of situation other
people
 were going through.
Education
 should not be limited or strictly academic.
Education
 will develop life skills
such
 as teamwork, helping others, and self-discipline.
Besides
, others topics are parallelly important so that should not be neglect.
In addition
, in high school’s students have a lot of
burden
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 to complete their tasks and submissions but if they manage time on weekends to spend time doing charity
work
such
 as helping
children
 in hard subjects, or taught them some difficult sports.
On the other hand
, not only
children
 build good bonding with the neighbourhood or with those
people
 but
also
, they do admire them. When school students interact with
people
, they get to learn a lot of life skills, when they help poor or disabled
people
, they will learn to appreciate their own life and they would realize that they have got many things that other
people
 don’t have.
Nevertheless
,
this
 kind of
work
experience
 students will never forget and keep doing voluntary
work
 whenever they get spare time.
Children
 could add charity
work
experience
 in future when they are looking for jobs and that
experience
count
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 a high value. Many colleges and companies are
also
 increasingly looking for
this
 type of
experience
. To conclude, considering above mentioned points, it is evident that, teenagers should be made to partake in unpaid
work
 as part of their schooling because it will help them in many ways mostly in
learn
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 things they would not ordinarily learn from their teachers and it will
also
 boost their chances of getting into
third
 level
education
 and select in job interviews in future.
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