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The cost of flying has decreased significantly over the last decades. This has made oversea travel much more accessible. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this trend.

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In the previous world, travelling abroad was only for
people
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 who are in the upper class;
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, there are a lot of
low cost
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 airlines recently and the
oversea
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overseas
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 trip is becoming affordable to any persons. In the following essay, I would argue a benefit of
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 phenomenon is an increase in international exchange and a downside would be to allow unfavourable kind of
people
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 to travel.
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 of all, making
the
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oversea
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overseas
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 travel more accessible increases opportunities to learn foreign languages and cultures for individuals who are passionate. Many students or researchers had to give up
to study
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 abroad because of its high cost in the past.
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, as it became affordable, a large number of individuals became able to interact with
people
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 around the world and contribute to
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 globalized world. As a consequence, there is a benefit not only to the persons but
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 to society.
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 of all,
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, to let any person able to go abroad could be problematic because it might produce passengers whose objective is detrimental for society.
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, there are a lot of cases that
people
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 who murdered escape from their country and avoid the polices
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 them.
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 would not happen if a trip to other countries is not as easy as nowadays. In my conclusion, the benefit against the phenomenon that oversea travel became accessible is that it enables to make a better society.
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, the downside would be that it
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 leads to
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unfavourable circumstances.
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