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Working abroad can help employees earn a great deal of money and gain more benefits. However, some people think this trend has many negative impacts. Discuss the advantage and disadvantage of working abroad

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Nowadays many
people
 are moving abroad either to work or study.
Although
, overseas exposure proves beneficial in terms of earning and a better standard of living
however
 its drawbacks would
also
 be considered well . There are two main advantages to
people
 working abroad.
First
 and foremost, through travelling abroad they will be able to show their hidden talent, which was not recognised in their home country. Hidden talent could be: managerial skills ,organisational techniques ,coordinating workforce .
As a
result
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 they will get not only get appreciation but
also
 recognition for the work .
In addition
 to the good value of money is the
second
 benefit associated with an immigrant.The currency rate is higher in other countries, which ones exchanged definitely accumulate to more money .
Consequently
 ,earning is equally proportionate to a better standard of living.
However
 , isolation is a drawback
that is
 faced by many
people
. New culture and new
people
 could be a hindrance to overcome loneliness and homesickness because of the time required to accept their culture and values.
hence
, less focus on work could impact their future and confidence as well. In conclusion ,advantages of working abroad is a better standard of living and recognition to the talent on contrary disadvantage are isolation and homesickness,
thus
 both setting has its own pros and cons.
however
, various factors would be evaluated and ascertain well before making
such
 decisions.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • expatriate
  • economic conditions
  • skilled labor
  • professional development
  • cultural experiences
  • networking opportunities
  • favorable tax arrangements
  • personal growth
  • resilience
  • cultural barriers
  • language barriers
  • legal regulations
  • employment regulations
  • healthcare access
  • safety standards
  • cost of living
  • repatriation
  • reverse culture shock
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