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Some countries have introduced a law to limit working hours for employees.Why is this law introduced?Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

Nowadays ,in certain countries, there is a range of
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 restricting the
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 spent at
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 for the staff . even though there are some reasons triggering
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 phenomenon , it is a positive development due to a couple of factors.
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 with , it is an indisputable fact that
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 are pivotal for people’ s job as much as special life .the
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 about
work
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 are mainly introduced to protect the rights of employees as social and economic.it should be noted that staffs working in a place where there is no law are always exploited.
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 to say, if individuals
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 without the
laws
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 that protect the right of staff, they could come across some challenges
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 as long working hours,and
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 of a normal working from 9 am to 5 pm ,they are more likely to stay at their workplace during a long
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.
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, they could be affected mental and physical,which lead to some health problems.take a worker who works from 9 am to 9 pm as an example; he or she may not be able to spend
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 for himself or his family ,and it makes him unhappy .
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, as long as he works a lot ,he will more likely have some health problems. Apart from why is
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 law introduced ,it is a positive development for a couple of reason.Fİrstly,being
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 at the companies prevents explosion.put simply ,it avoid workers from working for a long
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 and bad conditions for company interests.
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,in
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 fast-moving world of today ,people have become workaholics.
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 they are forgetting to draw a line between job and family .İf the working hours are fixed by
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 ,they have sufficient
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 to spend with family or leisure. İn conclusion , there a lot of reasons why
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 are essential at
work
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 and it is beneficial for individuals

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • work-life balance
  • productivity
  • well-being
  • fatigue
  • stress
  • mental health
  • innovation
  • leisure industry
  • economic impact
  • labor costs
  • competitiveness
  • workforce
  • part-time workers
  • shift workers
  • sectors
  • cultural shift
  • personal time
  • global impact
  • standardizing
  • employee well-being
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