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Some say you should always marry for love; others say that in an uncertain world it is wiser to marry for money. Discuss both points of view and give your own opinion.

#say #love #world #money #points
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Most of the
cuntries
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countries
 all around the world face the
chalange
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challenge
 of protecting
teenagers
 and these
cuntries
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countries
 take
diffrent
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different
stratergies
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strategies
 to
makesure
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make sure
 the young
genaration
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generation
 is well protected. United State is
also
 taken
necessory
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necessary
pracotions
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precautions
 to take care of
teenagers
.
As a result
 of that, the government has imposed curfew in some
areas
 of the
cuntry
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country
 and the youngers
are not allow
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 to go out after a
perticular
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particular
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timeline
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, especially during
night
time
 unless, there is an adult accompanied with them. I strongly agree with
this
 law and we should definitely keep our children
save
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safe
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 from the bad
socity
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society
.
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most of the researchers carried out by many
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institutes
, state
that
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high
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a high
the high
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 number of crimes are reported during the
night
time
.
Therefore
, limiting the citizen to mobile during
night
time
 is vital, especially for the
areas
 which have high crime rate. Due to
this
, there is
high
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a high
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 risk for
the
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apply
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young people to be
a
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apply
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victum
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victim
 of
such
 crime. As an example, there are many incidents where
teenagers
 were bullied and mugged during
night
time
 when
there
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they're
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traveling
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travelling
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 along.
Therefore
, it will always better to
ristric
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restrict
 the people to travel during
night
time
 unless they have their
gardians
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guardians
 with them.
This
 way, we will be able to avoid our children to expose to
such
unplesent
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unpleasant
 experiences.
On the other hand
, there are situations where the
teenagers
 were used for criminal activities. There are many police records indicate how young people were tricked in to break the law. There are many gangs who target
young
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the young
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 and fresh mind and addit them to certain drug and
brain wash
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brainwash
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 them to
condut
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conduct
criems
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crimes
. These groups are highly
funtional
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functional
 during
night
time
 and it is
therefore
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,therefore
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, best a teenager not to go out without an adult by there sight. To sum up, due to the fact that having curfew during
night
time
especiarly
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especially
 for the
areas
 where identifies as high risk will have
big
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a big
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 impact on the younger
genaration
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generation
.
This
 action will allow the parents to look after their children and
makesure
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make sure
 they will not be
victam
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victim
victims
 and
also
 keep them safe from illegal activities.
Therefore
, I completely agree
of
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 having
such
 lows imposed
for
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on
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 the
necessory
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necessary
areas
.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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