Some people believe that money is the most important factor for achieving happiness. however, others believe that happiness has nothing to do with money.Do you agree or disagree and give your opinion .

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bring peace and tranquillity to one’s

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? Some believe it is the key to happiness while others are of opinion that it is not of much significance.I partially agree with

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essay. On the one hand, folks who are of opinion that wealth is important for achieving contentment think so because, right from basic needs of

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to luxury, everything comes with a price tag.we certainly need

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to fulfil our demands. for ,example people who are affordable send their children to high standard schools to gain better knowledge and those who are not affordable may be forced to send to local schools where the standard of education might not be up to the mark.

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, in today’s materialistic world,it is

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property that creates respect in society. High financial status people are honoured and looked upon.

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,payment is considered a status symbol. to illustrate those who have high income amongst all in the community are given power and made head of the community.Needless to say, with wealth in hand ,one can lead a peaceful and comfortable

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, persons who are of the notion that

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can’t buy everything and owning high earnings merely does not bring joy may think so because sublime things like internal satisfaction, friendship, love and health cannot be bought with

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.A person level of joy

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people may be rich but lonely and land into depression .

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, a poor man will be happy with his family and friends by his side.

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,it is true that wealth can buy a lot of things but not happiness. In conclusion, I believe that

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is required to lead a decent

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it is not only the key factor for happiness.

Leena KapoorSun May 02 2021

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 7.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

300 words

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Some people believe that money is the most important factor for achieving happiness. however, others believe that happiness has nothing to do with money.Do you agree or disagree and give your opinion .

Include an introduction and conclusion

Government investment in the arts, such as music and theatre, is a waste of money. Governments must invest this money in public services instead. Do you agree or disagree?

13/05 Some people say that to prevent illness and disease, governments should focus more on reducing environmental pollution and housing problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some people believe that visitors to other countries should follow local customs and behaviour. Others disagree and think that the host country should welcome cultural differences. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.