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Some people believe the benefits of tourism outweigh the problems it creates in a particular place. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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In the past few decades, the
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 business is increased as the mode of air transportation developed.
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 gains a lot of popularity
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 some think it creates a cause in a
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 location. I believe that
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 has more advantages that overlap the problems.
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 comes with many positive effects but the main predominant reason is that it is the source to the local people. Whenever, the
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 visit to the
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 places, the local business gain lots of profit from them by selling traditional product and hotel owners provide rooms to them.
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, the Government
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 take taxes from both the
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 and local residents. From
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, they have to pay taxes as a
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 permit and communists have to pay tax to the government according to their law.
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, the Government have to maintain the road and health services to
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. Indirectly, it is beneficial for the locals. On the flip side, as the airlines are cheaper than many people travel to different places. It creates air pollution
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 a major problem for the environment.
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, most travel places are coastal areas. Travellers increase every year, pollution is increasing with
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 and residential that means garbage dump into the ocean.
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, as the report says that plastic and other waste material is thrown into the sea.
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 problem takes the upward trend and it never decreases. It affects marine life, many fishes face problem due to plastic they eat as to think it as a food and it kills them. In conclusion, I agree with the problems but there are many solutions to them.
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, we cannot neglect the benefits of
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.
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