Write a letter to a local restaurant that is very noisy. In your letter Introduce yourself Describe the problem Say what actions you will take

Dear Sir or Madam, I hope you are doing well. My name is Tajinder Singh, and I reside just opposite your restaurant. As a local council representative, I am writing
this
letter to bring your attention to the loud music played every night in your cafeteria.
Last
night, when I came back to my house after work, I wanted to get some rest because I was feeling very tired, but the loud music played by your staff in your background was very disturbing for the neighbourhood.
Moreover
, I
also
tried to talk with the restaurant staff regarding
this
issue, but no one took
this
issue seriously. As you know,
this
cafe is one of the most famous restaurants in
this
area, and
this
issue will
also
impact your future. I hope you will pay attention to these issues to improve our environment
otherwise
; I will not wait to complain to the owner who is one of my best friends. Yours sincerely, TS
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task achievement
The letter addresses all elements of the task prompt effectively, with a clear introduction, explanation of the issue and indication of the action to be taken. However, the explanation of potential consequences could be developed further to enhance the response.
coherence cohesion
The logical structure is mostly coherent, though transitions between paragraphs could be smoother. Greeting and closing are suitably formal. However, ensure that each paragraph focuses on a singular idea to maintain coherence throughout the letter.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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