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Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. discuss both views and give your opinion.

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some people argue that the primary environmental issue we are facing is that the loss of specific species of
plants
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animals
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 others believe that humans have to combat bigger problems. I believe there are more important environmental problems to tackle with it. on the one hand, human activities like mass construction have contributed to deforestation and losing
animals
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. Many species of
plants
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 and
animals
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 have eliminated from the ecosystem many
animals
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 are on the verge of extinction.
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, the chain of food will harm, and in the long-term many
plants
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 and
animals
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 because of the shortage of food will disappear.
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, the life of human being will get in danger in the long run,as our source of food is vanishing.
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, as I mentioned human activities have caused many problems, but one major issue is global warming. With the warming of the
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 ice caps are melting,and the surface of the seas are increasing.
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, many towns and villages are in danger of flooding.
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, CO2 from gas emissions from factories have caused older people can not to breathe properly,and they have got asthma.
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, like
animals
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 and ,
plants
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 the life of us are in danger of extinction. in conclusion, in my opinion,our future is more important compared to the loss of
animals
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 and
plants
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, and we should take some practical measures to tackle global warming.
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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • extinction
  • habitat loss
  • ecosystem
  • food chain
  • imbalance
  • interconnected
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • personal actions
  • policy changes
  • education
  • awareness
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