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You arranged to visit a friend in Canada but an important event at home now means that you must change the dates of the visit. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter •explain the important event •apologies for the situation •suggest a new arrangement

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Dear Simran, I hope you are doing splendidly! I want to give a heads-up about changes in my
visit
 dates to Canada. As I was so excited to meet you after 4 years but an important event has come over . My parent's 28 anniversary is on 15 October, just one day before my
visit
. My presence is important,so I have to make some arrangements for
this
 auspicious occasion. I am melancholy that I have to shift my dates ahead . I know we decided a lot about the trip , fun activities and the places to
visit
. I apologize for
this
 inconvenience . let's make some new arrangements as I have to
visit
 you after 10 days of my previous date .
Firstly
, remember to shift your vacation leave
according to
 my arrival date.
Secondly
, talked to the manager of the Hotel 'Taj' where we have decided to stay for some days. Let me know about your decision and again sorry for the trouble. yours loving, Ramanpreet
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task achievement
Include more specific details about the new arrangements and potential dates to enhance clarity and task achievement.
coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph maintains a single idea for improved clarity and flow.
coherence cohesion
The letter opens and closes with appropriate greetings, creating a friendly tone.
task achievement
The letter maintains a suitable and personable writing tone, making the reader feel involved.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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