There are severe social consequences to housing shortages in cities and only the government can solve these problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#consequences #shortages #cities #government

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huge housing shortages in

cities

and

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can play a big role to solve

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. Putting the discussion in the wider context that

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accommodation

is always a problem in the metro

cities

and has always been debatable. Some

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people

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government

has nothing to do with it , I wholeheartedly believe that

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can solve

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what are the social impacts of

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the scarcity

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of the places to live in and later it will discuss what necessary steps

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can take to overcome

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ends with the conclusion. It is true that

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there

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scarcity of houses in

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city

which is due to

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number of

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resides there.

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shortages

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leads

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to small houses and high real estate prices which directly impacts

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the

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people's social life.

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, low earning

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labourers

have to migrant to the

cities

for the job and

then

they have to live in small places paying high rents with

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number of family members.

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could force them to spend more on houses compare to other basic things like food and

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who can help citizens with

this

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? Its

government

! who can make strict and

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efficient

policies regarding the housing allocation and

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prices

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System

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can

also

develop the infrastructure in

such

a way that small places can

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accommodate

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amount of population with all basic

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amenities

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reasonable amount. In

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there will be

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social

issues on housing shortages in the

cities

but good governance can solve

this

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