Computers are replacing humans. Do u agree or disagree?

It is certainly true that as the world is becoming more modern day by day. Some people believe that in the modern era many of the tasks are doing
computer
instead
of people.
I'm not quite agree
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do admit that
computer
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is doing everything.
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, in terms of few
cases
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humans
attendance is mandatory. There are a wide range of reasons why
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think that in most of the world
computer
is contributing about many of the
cases
apart from
humans
. The prime point is that
computer
is one sort of modern technology which can aid
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way to develop our nation as well as it is unrealistic to think that
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the computer

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is
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thing.
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example that many of the decades ago every country had to send their crucial news to another country by
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. But it has changed widely
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this
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computer
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can easily send any news or documents within short a ti As opposed to,
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will start by looking at why I'm opposed to
this
question.
Firstly
, it is obviously clear that in
this
world every task or function is not equal. Due to that in terms of some
cases
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humans
are obligatory.
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time people’s attendance is must
also
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of labour require.
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is
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, to carry various kinds of things
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believe that people is
the
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massive part in few
cases
. To sum up,
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strongly believe that
humans
contribute amount is more rather than computers.
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