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Computers are replacing humans. Do u agree or disagree?

It is certainly true that as the world is becoming more modern day by day. Some people believe that in the modern era many of the tasks are doing
computer
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 of people.
I'm not quite agree
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 with
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 do admit that
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computer
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 is doing everything.
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, in terms of few
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cases
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humans
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 attendance is mandatory. There are a wide range of reasons why
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 think that in most of the world
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 is contributing about many of the
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 apart from
humans
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. The prime point is that
computer
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 is one sort of modern technology which can aid
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 way to develop our nation as well as it is unrealistic to think that
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computer
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the computer
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 is
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 thing.
Typical
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 example that many of the decades ago every country had to send their crucial news to another country by
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an individual
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. But it has changed widely
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 is because
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the computer
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 can easily send any news or documents within short a ti As opposed to,
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 will start by looking at why I'm opposed to
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 question.
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, it is obviously clear that in
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 world every task or function is not equal. Due to that in terms of some
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cases
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humans
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 are obligatory.
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, whenever any building would be built during
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 time people’s attendance is must
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lots
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 of labour require.
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because
, to carry various kinds of things
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 as stone, soil anything. That's why
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 believe that people is
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 massive part in few
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. To sum up,
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 strongly believe that
humans
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 contribute amount is more rather than computers.

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