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Some people believe that social media should be considered as a reliable provider of information, while others argue that social media is the main source of false news and disinformation. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some
people
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 believe that social
media
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 should be considered as a reliable provider of
information
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, while others argue that social
media
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 is the main source of false
news
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 and disinformation. I support the latter
view
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 and I will explain the reasons for that in my essay. There are some
people
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 who believe that we can get all
news
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 from social
media
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 in an unbiased and veracious form. They argue that
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 state
media
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/TV, social
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 cannot be under the influence of state propaganda.
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 of press freedom
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 social
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platforms
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, it is possible to get truthful and reliable
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 from disinterested parties. The supporters of
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view
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 argue that social
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platforms
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 do not have any interests to spread false
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 the
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 of certain political groups.
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,other
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, including me believe that it is unreasonable to consider social
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 as a reliable source of
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.
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 of all, unlike state-run
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media
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 there are not relevant mechanisms
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 control the veracity of
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information
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 provided
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 social
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platforms
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. It is
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 important to take into account that not only journalists
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 but
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 ordinary citizens spread data
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 and in most cases the reliability of
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news
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 is not checked.
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, from my point of
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, there are
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 some social
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platforms
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which
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 do not seem to serve
interests
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 of any party,
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, in
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 these
platforms
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 are bribed from certain
politicans
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politicians
 to spread
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news
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for
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 the favour of
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 ones. In conclusion, while some
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 support the
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 that we can rely on social
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 as a provider of reliable
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 , I believe that we cannot rely on social
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 as it often spreads fake
news
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.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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