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National costume or traditional wears of a particular country are an important part of the culture of that country, but with globalisation of cultures and other exchanges taking place, now they seem to be losing importance. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

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It is
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irrefutable
 that costumes
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 an imperative aspect of any country's traditions.
However
, a plethora of people
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 that it has lost its significance with changing times, while others opine that
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 not so. In
this
 essay, I will explain why I think that traditional wears have a fall in value these days.
To begin
 with, with the advent of
technology
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 world has become a global village, people migrate or travel easily, leading to change in tastes and interests regarding one's
dress
 code. A student who has migrated to a foreign land for higher education
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 often gets fascinated by
new
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 lifestyle and dressing style,
for instance
.
This
 can lead to
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 of interest among the individual in connection to his home country's
dress
 code. Another factor is that
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 lack
in
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 taste in national clothing due to boredom, as the fascination of
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 diminishes with the usage of
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same
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some
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 kind of clothes for a long period of time. When a child notices his grandparents and parents wearing a particular
dress
 over time, they find it monotonous and they want to opt for
different
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 dressing sense,
for instance
.
This
 can cause
loss
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 of interest in one's own national costumes. In conclusion, it can
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 that with the advancement in new technology and cultural exchange there is diminished interest and boredom among the people in accordance to their home culture. In my
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 I firmly agree
that is
 true that the significance of
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dress
 code has changed with time.
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